Goblin’s New Blood – Halloweensie Competition

And now, another entry into Susanna Leonard Hill’s Halloweensie story competition. The Rules: must be 100 words or fewer; must contain any form of the words monster, candy corn, and shadow; and must be appropriate for kids through age 12. So here goes! Oh, and I used only 88 words if we’re counting candy corn as one word, according to the rules. Woohoo!

 

Goblin’s New Blood

 

‘Tis the night before Monsters, when all through the house,

not a shadow is stirring, except for a louse.

 

The candy corn stockings are hung by the fire,

in hopes that the goblin will fill them much higher—

 

than past Halloweens. They’d all been huge duds.

A single, sour gumdrop, plus sprouting-eyed spuds.

 

The children grew sadder. They gave up the ghost.

Their stockings neglected in dust on a post.

 

But this year is different! The rumors run wild.

The goblin’s changed heart now that he has a child.

 

90 thoughts on “Goblin’s New Blood – Halloweensie Competition

  1. candicemarleyconner says:

    Love this Halloweensie twist on the Christmas poem! You’re rhyming words are great and I enjoyed the detailed visuals… sprout-eyed spuds, haha. I think you could totally expand on this and have a fabulous manuscript

  2. kathalsey says:

    Such a great idea, Jilanne, to use the NIGHT BEFORE CHRISTMAS as your mentor text! Funny an fit even has a story arc. BRAVO.

  3. Call of the Siren says:

    I’ll just echo everyone else and say, this is really great Jilanne.

    btw, I haven’t visited in a long time, and I REALLY love the way you must have redesigned your site while I was away. it looks great!

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Thanks, Nick, for the compliment on my Halloweensie story! I appreciate it. And thanks for the feedback on the website. It was a long time in the making. Russ Cox, the illustrator who created the graphic for my home page, is amazing. I LOVE his work! Thanks for stopping by!

  4. celticsea says:

    A Grinch-take on Halloween – what a great approach to the story. Then add in the rhyme and the adorable ending and you have a winning entry. Awesome job!

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Thanks, Kate! It’s funny how I didn’t think I had time to write a story, but then sat down, put on my headphones and decided it was now or never. Guess the pressure works. Maybe this is a remnant of my freelance days, LOL. Thanks for stopping by!

  5. Sandy Perlic says:

    I totally love this spin on The Night Before Christmas! The rhyme and the great word choices make it such a fun read.

  6. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    Love your Halloween twist on this familiar rhyme, Jilanne! And the idea of a single sour gumdrop and sprouting-eyed spuds taking the place of a lump of coal 🙂 What a fun story with a great ending! So glad you found the inspiration for a Halloweensie entry! 🙂

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Thanks, Susanna! I’m just glad I was able to take part in the festivities! Thanks for providing the venue that appears to be inspiring lots of PB writers! It’s quite an undertaking for you and your judges.

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