Dental Hygiene Halloween – Halloweensie Story Contest

I stopped packing boxes long enough to write this teensy-weensy story for Susanna Leonard Hills’ Halloweensie story contest. Here are the rules:

Write a 100 word Halloween story appropriate for children (title not included in the 100 words), using the words costumedark, and haunt.   Your story can be scary, funny or anything in between, poetry or prose, but it will only count for the contest if it includes those 3 words and is 100 words (you can go under, but not over!) Also, you may use the words in any form – e.g. haunt, haunts, haunted, darkness, darkening, costumed, whathaveyou 🙂  No illustration notes please!

Soooooooo here’s my entry:


Dental Hygiene Halloween

by Jilanne Hoffmann


Santa Claus, Easter Bunny, and Tooth Fairy trick or treated in their usual costumes.

At one dark house, Santa’s knock went unanswered, so he dropped a present down the chimney.




“That’s not how it works,” Easter Bunny scoffed.

At the next house, Easter Bunny rang the doorbell and hopped away, leaving an egg on the doorstep.




“That’s not how it works,” Tooth Fairy fussed.

At the next house, Tooth Fairy rang the bell—and waited.



The door opened.

“I’m a dentist in disguise!” Tooth Fairy exclaimed. She scooped up the candy, replaced it with coins, and skedaddled.

Haunting, isn’t it?




Now back to packing…..

92 thoughts on “Dental Hygiene Halloween – Halloweensie Story Contest

  1. viviankirkfield says:

    Well, I’d rather have the candy, Jilanne…that’s probably why I had so many cavities when I was a kid. 🙂 Very cute story…good luck with the packing…that’s more horrifying than the scariest Halloween haunted house. 🙂

  2. ptnozell says:

    Great to see characters from other holidays, and life-events, cameo on Halloween. Brings back wonderful memories of my eldest daughter in Santa costume many moons (and houses) ago.

    Good luck with the move. I’ve lost count of the bookshelves I’ve emptied & refilled since 1997 – always enjoy unpacking the books. Hope you enjoy the experience, too.

  3. Stacy S. Jensen says:

    I was so frightened. I pulled out the emergency “NERDS” in my desk drawer. Now I need to brush my teeth! Good luck with the packing. Glad you took a break to write. Packing and moving is always … well, interesting. 🙂

  4. Lady Fancifull says:

    I’m not sure whether I’m more shivering with horror at the d word, or at the thought of the boxes and the moving and nearly 20 years of ‘stuff’ It will no doubt take another 20 years to recover from it all, so you will need lots of helpful chocolate, and should therefore investigate local ds quite quickly.

    Now, hasn’t that turned the terror you evoked in your kindly readers back on to you, madam!

  5. Mrs. P says:

    Oh, I just had to read this post! The last two weeks have been dental hygiene hell for me. After going to one that injured me, I was trying out a new one….and boy was I scared! Turns out I must have had the tooth fairy, because she totally took care of me and I didn’t even cry. 😀

    So your story makes me wonder why did dentists give lollipops to kids if they were good?…at least that’s what they did when I was little. Nowadays all you get is tooth brushes and dental floss. Harumpf!

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      I’m sorry to hear about your dental nightmare. That can be much more gruesome than any Halloween creepiness. My dentist didn’t give me candy, but I was allowed to look through the “treasure chest” to find a trinket to take home. And if I had a cavity filled, my mom would let me get ice cream on the way home. My dentist didn’t use any form of numbing, so I had to sit through the pain of my teeth being drilled. Still gives me shivers.I think your dentist must have been trying to increase business if he/she gave you candy to take home. 😀

  6. clarbojahn says:

    Your story was j ust as fun as the comments which were all read by me. Some were really entertaining like learning you did not get any numbing. My childhood dentist did not know her job just drilling and drilling till she got most of the tooth not worried about the just cavity. Now all my teeth have crowns or caps because of it. she did not leave any tooth left. She was a new immigrant from Russia. I think my mother felt some commararderie with her. i could not understand her.

    Then we went to mc Donalds for a milk shake. Like the one above hurting all over again. On freshly drilled teeth. ouch!

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Yes, definitely my son’s worst nightmare. He already told me that eating all of your Halloween candy at once is better for you than spreading it out over a long time. Hmmmm. Wonder what studies he’s planning on citing?

  7. Sheila says:

    I love how you combined different holidays and sent them all out trick or treating! It makes me wonder why the holidays aren’t combined more often. Good luck with the packing. I hope you and your son will have a fun Halloween with lots of candy!

  8. Susanna Leonard Hill says:

    How clever of the Tooth Fairy to disguise herself as a dentist… and get all the candy! And love how Santa and the Easter Bunny totally misunderstood Halloween 🙂 Thanks so much for joining in the Halloweensie fun – I’m glad you were able to take a few minutes out from packing!

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Thanks, Cathy! What do you mean? Santa, Easter Bunny, and Tooth Fairy aren’t REAL?!!! I am soooo disallusioned. I may need to eat large quantities of chocolate this weekend (starting now) to get over the disappointment.

      • Cathy Ballou Mealey says:

        Great solution! I must be chocolate deprived because I really do believe in Santa, Bunny and TFairy. I mean – gifts, candy and money? Trifecta

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      It WAS just the right excuse! Things are piling up around here, literally. And I’m having difficulty maintaining any form of concentration. I jump from priority to priority to priority, often without completing a task before jumping. Crazy. Looking forward to collapsing sometime around the beginning of December.

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Thank, Laurel! Whenever asked, my mother would always say “we are all Santa Claus/the tooth fairy/the Easter bunny.” I could never pin her down to admit anything. So I’m sticking with my mom’s approach. There must be a gray area there, somewhere….. The “tinkerbell” in my story looks a bit androgynous, don’t you think? And maybe a little scary. Perhaps my tooth fairy has escaped from a Brothers Grimm tale.

  9. Mrs. P says:

    Ha! sound like a friend of mine!

    Hope the packing/moving is going to your satisfaction…and maybe there will be a first Christmas in a new house? 😀

    • Jilanne Hoffmann says:

      Oh yes! We are now in and unpacking. Will it ever end?! I’m trying to get back into my blogging community, but it’s slow going. I’m relieved that we bought a house that wasn’t a fixer-upper, because we’re fixing/changing so many things already. 😀 Can’t wait to string some lights, pour a cup of spicy eggnog, sit by the gas fireplace, and listen to the rain fall on the parched earth of California!

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